深耕厚植促教研，提质增效助高考----“课题组押中全国新高考I卷读后续写”与“高考作文名师分析”

一、课题组押中全国新高考I卷读后续写

中国英语阅读教育研究院专项课题与广东省新强师项目课题组携手，聚焦读后续写，深耕细作，务实笃行，将课题的理论成果、《高考评价体系》与新课标的关键要素对标起来，互动联通。课题成员中山市龙山中学袁丹纯老师发表在《疯狂英语》的两篇读后续写教学设计--《被“天使“吻过的歌声”》《良言一句暖三冬》（见图1和图2）与2022年全国新高考I卷读后续写高度吻合。主题语境为“人与自我”，内容是“孩子因病或身份受到嘲笑，深感自卑，在老师或陌生人的鼓励下，参加比赛发生了改变”的成长故事。

另外，在袁老师编写的校本教材《读后续写考前最后一击》中，她提炼了十个押题主题深化句型中，有五个与2022年新高考I卷读后续写真题的成长类主题呼应。如下：

【成长类结尾】

6. 追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会，充分利用机会，你就有机会实现梦想。--梦想与时间

It's never too late togo for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dreams.

7. 只要我们敢于梦想，不被困难所阻挡，一切皆有可能。--梦想与困难

As long aswe dare to dream and don't let difficulties get in our way, anything is possible.

8. 只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难，我们最终会实现我们的目标（成功）。--坚持的力量

As long as we don’t give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal (success) finally.

9. 现在，我为我的样子感到骄傲，而且更快乐，因为我已经意识到，决定你真正是谁的是你的个性。接纳自我与自信

Now, I am proudof what I look like and much happier, because I have realized it is your personalitythatdecides who you truly are.

10. 我们唯一能做的就是保持积极的态度。--积极人生态度

The only thing we can do is hold a positive attitude.

本次，课题组成员押中高考读后续写真题是偶然，也是必然。基于课题组对读后续写理论与实践孜孜不倦、抽丝剥茧的研究，我们有理由相信，立足于课堂的“真”研究，一定会助力一线教学，促进培养学生的学科素养以及应试能力，实现素养与应试能力的统一。

二、全国新高考I卷读后续写名师分析

肖莉英，深圳市艺术高中英语学科组长，湖南师范大学英语硕士，省教学比武一等奖获得者，主持国家级课题1项，省级课题1项，市级课题1项，参与国家级课题2项，出版和发表多篇论文。

【读后续写解读】

名师解读试题语篇文字浅显，故事情节简单。

患脑疾的10岁男童David 身残志坚，积极参加学校各项活动，而且尽力而为，同学们对他的病情和状况习以为常，从不另眼相看。David 报名参加七所学校联合举办环乡村长跑比赛，而且坚持训练。尽管每次都落后于人，但能完成比赛。

然而，就在比赛起跑前， David准备放弃了。原因竟然是：害怕来自别的学校的学生嘲笑他。身为特殊教育专业老师的“我”，了解到情况，与David 坐下来促膝谈心。

用框架图来梳理故事如下：

续写的故事主题最后落脚到“David 勇敢做自己，世界善良而美好”。

续写第一段：我与David 的促膝谈心。写作重点：

1. “我”与David 的谈心过程：比赛之前，言简意赅，句句珠玑，David的神态动作；

2. “我”对David 的鼓励------不要在乎别人的看法，勇敢做自己，完赛就是胜利；

3. David在“我”的鼓励下态度的转变：决定放弃顾虑，勇敢参赛。

续写第二段：David 比赛的过程和结果。写作重点：

1. David 比赛过程中奋勇拼搏的样子：跌倒、落后、气喘吁吁等等；

2. David 落后时，观众们（同学、家长、陌生人）给予的、鼓励；

3. David 完赛后的快乐和对“我”的感恩之言。

写作指向立德树人的课程目标。其中有四“德”：

1. 身残志坚，做到最好自己------即使天生有缺陷，你也是最棒的你；

2. 不畏困难，勇于挑战自我------百折不饶的拼搏精神，是有力的的证明；

3. 春风化雨，老师循循善诱------老师的帮助与鼓励，改变学生的生命；

4. 理解尊重，世界充满善良------善良是理解、尊重、懂得为别人喝彩。

以下附两位优秀英语教师的下水作文供大家学习参考。

下水作文第一篇

深圳市艺术高中黎子菡

【2022年高考原题重现】

It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.

I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.

What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!

I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."

I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well-he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.

David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer -that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. With his head silently buried, I could tellhowfrustratedandheart-brokenthislittleboywas. “Actually, I’ve just talked with your coach and teammates, and they were really confident about you, hoping you couldjoin them.” Hearingwhat I said, David lookedupatmeinsurprise. A flash of hope sparkledhiseyes. “CanI jointherace? But I don't wanttoholdthemback.” David seemed pretty worried. “You’ve gone such a long waytobehere. Don’tletothers’ opinions get in the way to your success. See, they’re all waiting for you.” I pointed to the starting line, where the team werewavingathim, shouting hisnameexcitedly.

I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. Whenthesignal pistolwent off , buthe was stillleftbehind. The unusual way of movement drew everyone’s attention. With all eyesfixed on David, his small body was gradually swallowed up by the thick forest. I was on the edge of myseat, wonderingif I was wrong about persuading himtorun. Aftertwentyminutes, some runners started to rush out of the woods one after another. To our astonishment, our team ran likeaflockofbirds, surrounding David to protect him throughouttheroute. At a steady speed, they crossedthefinishingline with a bang, all the students shot out like a flash except for David, who was running as fast as he could as the lastfewteams, but were overwhelmed by everyone’s applaud and cheering. Eventually we won the fifth prize with best cooperation, and nobody was unsatisfied. It couldbethebestproofofthesaying, “one person can go fast, but a group can go far.”

下水作文第二篇

深圳市艺术高中蒋紫颖

We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. His fingers tied together nervously. I waited there for him to start speaking. “Do you think I am good enough to be in the competition, Miss?” he said. “Everyone faces obstacles, and we all feel discouraged from time to time, but be confident because you put in hard works. You are good enough to be at the line with your teammates.” I said gently, trying to encourage him. He listened and thought about it for a while, then said: “Thank you Madame, I will try my best then!”

I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.He got ready quickly. The race gun sounded and the runners raced off to the forest. David was a bit slower than the others at first, but soon he caught up. I sat in the audience, cheering loudly for him. He looked focused and calm. Athin layer of sweat covered the nape of his neck. He was the last to finish the race, but he received warm encouragements after he crossed the line. He happily ran towards me and shouted: “I did it, thank you Miss!” Approaching challenges with optimism, hard work and confidence is important, and we shouldn’t overlook the power that we can give others.

编辑：朱咏梅

校对：朱咏梅

终审：辛键