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Sir不止一次和学生强调过写作中书写的重要性，业界也基本达成共识，就是要想获得写作的高分，首先要有一手漂亮的字。我看到很多同行在让学生练字，但是花费了大量的时间和精力后，成效并不显著。究其原因，主要是书写的根源问题没有找准，以及漂亮书写的标准没有定义。学生需要知道“好”的标准，而后才能找到好的方法。

同样，很多人会将读后续写的侧重点放在写上面，学生在进行了大量的练习后依然收效甚微，无法写出一篇令人满意的文章来，主要原因在于不能进行有效的训练。昨天在和同行交流的时候，我们一致认为读后续写的侧重点在“读”上。学生唯有能把文章读懂、读通、读透，才能写就一篇行文自然、融洽度高，兼具文化内涵的续写。这种能力更多体现在教师的文本解读能力上，由教师的解读能力带动学生的阅读能力，让学生进一步进行模仿，最终实现创作。

17年下半年的这篇续写，是截止到现在史上唯一一篇带有标题的续写。故事讲述了和母亲的旅行经历，行文看似非常平淡，和17届学生写的两篇有很大的不同。

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

A Vacation with My Mother

I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother---loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.

My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.

David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.

On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections (反对). If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.

段落：

P1：The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.

P2：We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.

范文1：

Para1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Mom insisted that we must make full use of it since we had brought it. David and I looked at Dad, hoping he could stop her crazy idea. To our great disappointment, he agreed. We spent a whole afternoon seeking a nicecamping place and set up our tent before the night fell. It was the first time that I had thought mom could be wise as I admiring our stunning tent. “Oh, I forgot the pillows!” what a misconception. Despite the ache of my neck, we had some great nights.

Para2: We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. The bright blue sky, the limitless green grass, the group of sheep, the setting sun and the countless stars in the curtain of nights kept me spellbound. Not only did we see the picturesque scenery, we also managed to consider mom’s scandals as a kind of fun.I really love my Mum.To our relief, we arrived at grandparents’ place and went back to our home with all of four people. It was so fortunate to see my friends again.

范文2：

Para1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we brought with us. We decided to camp along the river throughout the town. The views there were surprisinglybeautiful--the warm sunshine, the fresh air, the clean water. We sat on the grass, hooked by the splendid nature. However, when Dad was about to put up our tent, it suddenly hit him that Mom again, had left it completely, as well as the camping equipment in the hotel. Speechlessly, Dad had to go back to fetch them to continue our camping.

Para2: We drove through several states and saw lots of sights along the way. Every time we got to a new place, Mom would cheer up like a child. Calling out David and I, she got off the car, laughed and danced around. She held our hands in her hands, leading us around the big city, the small town and the nice nature. When we came back to the hotel after the tiring but excellent visit, she would hug us and kiss us on our faces. How sweet she was! Absent-minded and forgetful as she was, she never forgot to express her love to us.

范文3：

Para1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we brought with us. That night we set up our tent in a park. The moon was held up above the sky, shining her smooth and charming moonlight. Twinkle stars blinking, fragrant breeze gently stroked my head, as if comforting all the tiredness along the trip. The next day, Dad brought us to the car and asked me to clear all the things away. Not long after we came back to the car, Mom arrived, then we continued our trip.

Para2:We drove through several states and saw lots of sights along the way. I was still recalling the splendid scenery when we were in the living room of my grandparents'. David excitedly narrated our experience, eyes blazing with enthusiasm. Worries came to his forehead when he explained the trouble. A smile lifted the corner of his mouth when it came to camping. Suddenly Mom shouted out in a strange voice. Haunted by a strong sense of horror, I heard Mom screaming "I forgot the tent!"

范文4：

Para1:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we brought with us. We were happy to see it still packed, and hoped it would be packed forever. However, things came to its turning point. Mom lost Dad in the gas station when we were sleeping. What’s worse, as the dark approached, we met the same trouble again. Brave as Mom was, she decided to camp near the road waiting for Dad. The wind cried widely like a monster. Tear took control of us. Mum embraced us tightly singing a smooth song, which really released us. We didn’t meet Dad in the last few days, but we felt comfortable staying with Mom.

Para1: We drove through several states and saw lots of sights along the way. The tent became a closer friend then. Every time we camped, Mom would read a book or sing a soft song. The warmth of her arm never faded away in my memory. Though she was forgetful,laughter accompanied us along the way. We finally met poor Dad in our destination. This trip made me realize that love may have many ways, but it can always warm people in the dark.